tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8466314672723988836.post2870581635439697063..comments2023-09-30T00:43:13.890-07:00Comments on The Current Season: Steven Bindernagel & Tomas Espina @ The Armory Show (Revised)moderatorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07653277482083573538noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8466314672723988836.post-52180600567304070462011-03-24T16:34:11.759-07:002011-03-24T16:34:11.759-07:00Delete comma after "artist" in the first...Delete comma after "artist" in the first sentence. Delete comma between "gallery" and "you're" in second sentence. The Armory Show is for the art connoisseur ... with big bucks! However, us little people can find joy in the show too, I suppose. Maybe put the words "that is" at the beginning of the statement in the parentheses - to make it read more clearly. Maybe put the word "a" before "$30" or put "for" after "$30". I like the opening thought - funny.<br /><br />By the word "their", at the end of the second paragraph, are you referring to people themselves or the art? I'm kind of joking here, I'm pretty sure you mean the art. Maybe tweak the sentence a little to help those of us (me) who will forever be confused by random pronouns.<br /><br />The capital "T" used to describe the layout of the show would be a confusing reference to those who did not actually attend. Delete the comma after "Bindernagel". Capitalize "gallery" because it is paired with its proper name - CRG. In the last sentence of paragraph three, the word "aloud" should be spelled "allowed".<br /><br />Paragraph four: your statement "every type of creative mind..." I question because, for example, rocket scientists are creative, but they were not featured in the show. It's a broad statement, maybe you could add "in the art world" or something. Delete "really did" in the last sentence and turn "prove" into "proved".<br /><br />The writing describes both good and bad aspects of the show. It's well written with clever moments and personality.Cathrine Hancherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10868944832132939836noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8466314672723988836.post-50645443755319096902011-03-10T19:33:16.241-08:002011-03-10T19:33:16.241-08:00My late grandfather, Edvin Strautmanis, has a piec...My late grandfather, Edvin Strautmanis, has a piece in The Armory Show. He did large abstract expressionst/action paintings in the 70s in his SoHo studio, showing on occasion at Allen Stone Gallery.<br /><br />www.alexastrautmanis.blogspot.comAlexa Strautmanishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06784045404057241884noreply@blogger.com