tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8466314672723988836.post377303988091848007..comments2023-09-30T00:43:13.890-07:00Comments on The Current Season: The First Viewing of Dreamlandsmoderatorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07653277482083573538noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8466314672723988836.post-54413950512021832232016-12-17T12:18:44.582-08:002016-12-17T12:18:44.582-08:00I enjoyed your review of the exhibit in the Whitne...I enjoyed your review of the exhibit in the Whitney. I do however believe that your first paragraph should be expanded to more than just the one sentence. When you state that the website informs visitors that they will “connect different historical moments of cinematic experimentation”, this would be a good point to state your conviction of whether or not they delivered on their promise. <br /><br />The second paragraph had some minor grammatical and/or spelling corrections needed. For example, your second sentence could use the either the word “it” or the words “the film” before “is full of filigree and sparkle”. However, your descriptions gave a good visual and emotional representation of what you experienced. Your conclusion that it was impossible to view the entire exhibit in one visit was spot on and gave a good sense of the expansiveness of the exhibit. <br /><br />Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14098691406954626495noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8466314672723988836.post-24969037698572987792016-12-12T19:27:59.175-08:002016-12-12T19:27:59.175-08:00I think that the start of your review could give a...I think that the start of your review could give a clearer sense of how the show is generally structured, specially because it is such an overwhelming, expansive exhibit. Your ending sounds a little bit critical, which maybe you could push more.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14317683604304088952noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8466314672723988836.post-75660139480300495492016-12-12T12:29:53.764-08:002016-12-12T12:29:53.764-08:00I really like your interpretation of this exhibit,...I really like your interpretation of this exhibit, and how you relate it to the hectic and overwhelming nature of our media consumption as a society today! It's a very apt description of the experience. The only real changes I would make are some small spelling and grammar issues, such as the word "quite" in the second paragraph. You could also maybe think about comparing and contrasting the vastly different ways audio and visual experiences were investigated throughout the exhibit. Otherwise, I thought this was a really great description of the feeling of the pieces you chose to talk about!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05071170370623050888noreply@blogger.com