tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8466314672723988836.post4508524769622724876..comments2023-09-30T00:43:13.890-07:00Comments on The Current Season: REGARDING WARHOL AT THE METROPOLITAN MUSEUMmoderatorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07653277482083573538noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8466314672723988836.post-1890176602003647782012-12-08T07:04:47.575-08:002012-12-08T07:04:47.575-08:00While I agree with your assessment of the lay out ...While I agree with your assessment of the lay out I find the beginning of your review to be overly descriptive of the exhibition space. I think it would be more compelling to address the art itself earlier on. You comparisons and formal descriptions are excellent but you continue to follow the physical space of the exhibition to dictate the organization of your review. Because you only described rooms in the first half of the exhibit it leads the reader to believe you didn't pay attention after that. I think this would be more effective if it was less grounded in the physical space of the exhibition and you analyzed it with more perspective. I think you've done a great job describing things in your reviews all semester- that can be very hard in a review!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06977527005804192657noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8466314672723988836.post-32894039432676451412012-12-07T09:30:52.914-08:002012-12-07T09:30:52.914-08:00I appreciate that you have given a review that is ...I appreciate that you have given a review that is less than flattering of the exhibit and that you have questioned the organization in such a way. I feel that most of us have been focusing on shows that we've enjoyed, so to read this is refreshing. <br />There are a few sentences that could be revised- Aria pointed one out, but also watch this: "The overall effect feel like travelling through time". Just stick that "s" in there on "feels" and it'll read smoother. Jaclynhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14050618205258919826noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8466314672723988836.post-69662577039502613672012-12-07T07:26:49.364-08:002012-12-07T07:26:49.364-08:00This is an interesting review- I enjoy the critiqu...This is an interesting review- I enjoy the critique of the use of space and the quantity of work. Be careful of overusing the word "showcasing"- some alternative words might be "highlight," "emphasize," or "accentuate." <br /><br />In the second to last paragraph you mention "The photorealistic work provokes the discussion of a dialogue between photography and painting..." It might read better to take out "the discussion of."<br /><br />I think you have a very strong closing.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com