tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8466314672723988836.post486130061644108561..comments2023-09-30T00:43:13.890-07:00Comments on The Current Season: David Altmejd at Andrea Rosen Gallerymoderatorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07653277482083573538noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8466314672723988836.post-27479383367462453572011-04-28T15:30:40.252-07:002011-04-28T15:30:40.252-07:00You did a really good job of describing the pieces...You did a really good job of describing the pieces themselves, which is impressive considering their physical complexity. However, maybe the review would benefit from a clearer layout of the gallery space itself. You mention a main room and an inner room- does the order of viewing matter to the exhibition? <br /><br />Also, the background info on the artist's earlier work could be more helpful if you expand on how the work has changed specifically rather than leaving it at, "a body of Plexiglas work that has a cleaner and more controlled aesthetic." You then go on to describe the current piece as "clean" and "perfected," so that is a little unclear.<br /><br />As far as grammar/word choice, a few nit-picks:<br /><br />You use "large" twice in the introduction describing the same works.<br /><br />"Jesus figures in churches"-- maybe "Crucifix" would be more accurate.Sallie Mizehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07592893476914419214noreply@blogger.com