tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8466314672723988836.post8629778335815648982..comments2023-09-30T00:43:13.890-07:00Comments on The Current Season: Seductive Subversion: Women Pop Artists, 1958-1968, Brooklyn Museummoderatorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07653277482083573538noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8466314672723988836.post-84105364156282395392010-10-26T10:15:42.599-07:002010-10-26T10:15:42.599-07:00I think you definitely got the feeling of unearthe...I think you definitely got the feeling of unearthed female history across though I might stray away from cliche statements such as "the only recognized place for a woman was in the home." <br />When talking about Kusama's work I think it would be helpful to add a little clarification toward the end of the paragraph. Especially after saying "Kusama creates her own decadent ritual in this 24 minute film that sits uncomfortably against popular culture." How does her work sit uncomfortably? Perhaps a different verb would be useful.Nicole Riviecciohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14151100448907330180noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8466314672723988836.post-38482897834813151292010-10-26T04:56:44.631-07:002010-10-26T04:56:44.631-07:00I liked your description of these three works and ...I liked your description of these three works and their relevance to this male-dominated art movement. I think that in order to both emphasize the significance of these female contributions to Pop Art and end your review with a strong concluding statement, it may be helpful to rearrange your last two sentences.<br /><br />There is a subject/verb agreement error in the third paragraph, first sentence – “sculptures […] explores”. Also in that sentence, I might change “the woman’s role” to either “the female role” or “women’s roles” in order to make it clear that you aren’t referring to one woman in particular. This phrase appears a couple of times in the second paragraph as well.Sarah Mackenzie Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06219807531519311620noreply@blogger.com