tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8466314672723988836.post9110447866651190157..comments2023-09-30T00:43:13.890-07:00Comments on The Current Season: Stieglitz, Steichen, Strandmoderatorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07653277482083573538noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8466314672723988836.post-29233998864523504042010-12-17T09:04:21.792-08:002010-12-17T09:04:21.792-08:00The opening is a little awkward, maybe include the...The opening is a little awkward, maybe include the artists names in the first sentence. Your connection between Stieglitz and the Met I though was an interesting bit of information. Revise punctuation (commas seem to be missing), Stieglitz as a possessive needs to be added in paragraph 2. Incorrect capitalization in some areas (example, paragraph 3). Do not italicize dates of a work, inorganic not “in organic,” but I’m not sure if that description is best suited for what you are trying to say. Try to avoid subjective terms when describing the work.a. sodenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01699705840281172379noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8466314672723988836.post-23353737356810427642010-12-16T04:15:45.444-08:002010-12-16T04:15:45.444-08:00The descriptions of Stieglitz's use of tone to...The descriptions of Stieglitz's use of tone to create striking images are nicely done. However, the review does not comment very thoroughly on the other two artists included in the show. In this regard, it would have been helpful to the reader if the author had expanded on Stieglitz's influence on Steichen and Strand, an idea that is touched upon towards the end of the review. Also, there are some spelling errors and missing words throughout the text that made it slightly difficult to read.Sarah Mackenzie Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06219807531519311620noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8466314672723988836.post-37994791927829202422010-12-14T20:23:26.939-08:002010-12-14T20:23:26.939-08:00As a reader I’m skeptical of the terms “great” and...As a reader I’m skeptical of the terms “great” and “best,” particularly when used in the opening paragraph of a critical piece. It is more helpful when the author describes the photos as ground-breaking and diverse, and I’d like to hear more about this aspect of the work. The author gives a clear description of the pieces discussed, though it seems somewhat uneven to only write about the Stieglitz photos. If the author makes this choice, the significance of including two additional photographers in the exhibit should be noted. Recommend double-checking sentence structure, spelling, and use of commas. (O’Keeffe is misspelled.)Sara Campothttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03844043447033990888noreply@blogger.com